Wolfy Dalfyry
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Hello, all! I've made a character named Allison Birch, and I need help with figuring out if my change to her profile is good, or bad, and what about the change needs changing.
This is the original.
Name: Allison Birch
Appearance: Allison stands at exactly five feet, and is slender and pasty, with long dark brown hair and emerald green eyes. Her normal attire consists of dark blue denim jeggings, a dark brown t-shirt with long dark green sleeves underneath, and black flats. Her hair is almost always tied into two ponytails that come out of one light blue hairband.
Personality: She is a shy coward who hates trouble. She is also a book worm and an animal lover.
This is the new.
Allison Birch is a petite woman of young adult age, twenty-two to be precise. Her long brunette hair is most often tied together by a light blue hairband, although split apart to make two ponytails. Her natural eye color is emerald green, with her regular attire consisting of dark blue denim jeggings, a t-shirt of the same brown as her hair with long dark green sleeves underneath, and ink-black flats. Allison tries to stay out of trouble and will freeze-up on the spot when confronted with a crowd, or violence, but once you get to know her, she is quite kindhearted, bubbly, and inquisitive. When she is on her own, she will usually find a book to read and curl up in a pile of blankets and pillows to read said book. She will also help any animal she can, and wishes to own a cat, for she loves them very much.
This is the original.
Name: Allison Birch
Appearance: Allison stands at exactly five feet, and is slender and pasty, with long dark brown hair and emerald green eyes. Her normal attire consists of dark blue denim jeggings, a dark brown t-shirt with long dark green sleeves underneath, and black flats. Her hair is almost always tied into two ponytails that come out of one light blue hairband.
Personality: She is a shy coward who hates trouble. She is also a book worm and an animal lover.
This is the new.
Allison Birch is a petite woman of young adult age, twenty-two to be precise. Her long brunette hair is most often tied together by a light blue hairband, although split apart to make two ponytails. Her natural eye color is emerald green, with her regular attire consisting of dark blue denim jeggings, a t-shirt of the same brown as her hair with long dark green sleeves underneath, and ink-black flats. Allison tries to stay out of trouble and will freeze-up on the spot when confronted with a crowd, or violence, but once you get to know her, she is quite kindhearted, bubbly, and inquisitive. When she is on her own, she will usually find a book to read and curl up in a pile of blankets and pillows to read said book. She will also help any animal she can, and wishes to own a cat, for she loves them very much.
